The Pitch:
https://youtu.be/BrEf9nolcO8
Reflection: Everyone seemed to like my idea, dancer or not. Nothing about my feedback was very surprising or silly; people were really nice and encouraging. One person told me to look more realistically at my idea, for example how to ensure that my shoe patches will be reliable. It helped me get a more realistic approach to my idea, and to expand on the details in my pitch. On the other hand, actually doing the pitch was a different story; I found it to be very difficult because I didn't feel really comfortable. My voice was very nasally (I'm getting over a pneumonia still) and my hands were moving way too much for the small frame of the recording.
Changes: I made some drastic changes in this pitch, including getting a better recording of myself. I also tried to move my hands less- which I think made my pitch less distracting. Furthermore, I also added a little more detail about my product, to really let my investors know what my idea is all about.
Hi Cassidy,
ReplyDeleteThis is a great pitch! I love that you dressed so professionally, and videotaped yourself standing up! Also, you spoke loudly and clearly enough, so I didn't have to strain to hear you. This sounds like a great idea, because I'm sure as a dancer you put a lot of wear and tear on your dance shoes. This would make the cost of being a dancer a lot less financially stressful, so I can see your idea being very profitable.
Here's a link to mine: http://maursfirstblog.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
I like your presentation here , a lot. The camera remains still, and you, being the main concern of the camera, are both assertive and resigned. It's a really strong video. Like, it would do well at an MBA meeting. Your idea is also very strong. I guess I'd ask if your product would be something that FIXED the shoes, or of the glue is sold to dancers and fixed at their own location.
ReplyDeleteGood stuff though!
http://coffeemumbles.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no2.html
Hey Cassidy,
ReplyDeleteGood pitch. I am not in fact a ballerina but could try to grasp what your pitching here. I can see how those point ? shoes take some beating when you are doing as many tippy toes moves as I see in ballet. Your pitch clear and concise. I'd be an investor :)
Check out mine:
http://sawyerlambert.blogspot.com/
I enjoyed your post. I think your idea serves a very niche market which could make it highly successful. I think that the fact that you keep improving your your elevator pitch is making your idea clearer, which is better to attract investors.
ReplyDeleteI think your idea is very innovative! I wonder if the product can be made for other markets as well. I've been told my pitch suffered from the camera being propped up still, but your pitch doesn't suffer from this as you seem very comfortable in front of the camera. The money back guarantee is sure to help ease any worries as well. You can see my pitch here: http://brientrep.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-ptich-no-2.html
ReplyDeleteReally great idea cassidy. I am not a dancer but I've actually heard of this problem before. This seems like the perfect solution. You did an excellent speaking in your elevator speech and had a lot of confidence. I hope to hear about this business one day!
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